Her cold hands trace the lands spreading pallor;
In their wake, antique lace of crystal ice-
Scrimshaw tracery of pale frost flowers;
Tears a fickle flurry from fragile skies-
But bitter is her wintered breath the wind,
And ghostly the sound of its satin sighs;
Blue-veined deep the frozen lake of her skin;
Her voice a swansong of icicle lies-
Skeletal spine studded with evergreen-
The sheen of her shimmering white-wove veil
Crowned with holly bush and poinsettia leaf;
Her eyes drowning blue, her skin ghostly pale.
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Your sonnet is filled to the brim with imagery and each snippet in its perfect place to make this a sonnet worth reading...
I loved all the alliteration! And the word "scrimshaw" is awesome.
The whole thing reminds me of that fairy tale about the Ice Queen.
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